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HONOURABLE MENTIONS (2016)These were stories that came in second! Some of them were really close to winning first place! These stories deserve the recognition as well, therefore, we've decided to show the runners-up whom have competed for the Best (respective genre/s) Story Awards!
Please Read: Note that the ratings below are not objective. Reviews may differ in standards/length because they are written from the biased perspective of the two main judges of each category, and not the whole panel. |
BEST Adventure STORY
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SOLIDUS: UNITYWritten by K. L
Freedom. Love. Unity. Three mututally exclusive concepts that became hopelessly entangled once I met Constantine. |
Title and summary:
Title was intriguing albeit confusing and really out of the blue for us. It was relevant to the story however. Summary is to the point, and first person view was interesting (which we thought was a fresh take on a traditional, overview-like summary.) Cover art is good, precise, and reminiscent of a bestseller like Hunger Games. It could have been a little more individualistic. The anime art (which we saw while opening the story) gave a cutesy feeling to it, which takes away the projected seriousness of the title and summary.
Plot/storyline:
Plot was unique and fresh. The twist at the end regarding Constantine is a delightful surprise, well executed. Ending was predictable, but it was sweet and appeasing to readers.
Story content/flow:
The introduction was confusing to us, with outlandish names and a foreign storyline having to be registered immediately. But it was not a big issue. Vocabulary used was medium to advanced, which was wonderful. Storyline in episodes 1 and 2 were cliche and predictable, for example, the meeting with Constantine. However, we thought that the story was well paced and well executed, although it was a pity that the story could not break away from a cliche storyline. This story dealt with mature themes on a light note, which we thought was advantageous and educational. In a nutshell, though confusing at times, these confusing moments were well accounted for and the story well written.
Error:
There was no noticeable errors and language used was appropriate. No technical errors either. Well done.
Impact:
We loved the abundance of choices available. We also liked the fact that we could get to choose the type of personality Solidus has as this gave us control over his actions. This story fits very well into adventure category. In general, this was an interesting story and we thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Recommendation:
This is a well written story with a well developed plot. It is also short and sweet. We definitely recommend reading this story.
First Rating: 8/10
Plot/Storyline:9/10
Content/Flow: 8.5/10
Grammar: 4.9/5
Spelling: 4.9/5
Impact: 8/10
Overall Rating: 8.7/10
Title was intriguing albeit confusing and really out of the blue for us. It was relevant to the story however. Summary is to the point, and first person view was interesting (which we thought was a fresh take on a traditional, overview-like summary.) Cover art is good, precise, and reminiscent of a bestseller like Hunger Games. It could have been a little more individualistic. The anime art (which we saw while opening the story) gave a cutesy feeling to it, which takes away the projected seriousness of the title and summary.
Plot/storyline:
Plot was unique and fresh. The twist at the end regarding Constantine is a delightful surprise, well executed. Ending was predictable, but it was sweet and appeasing to readers.
Story content/flow:
The introduction was confusing to us, with outlandish names and a foreign storyline having to be registered immediately. But it was not a big issue. Vocabulary used was medium to advanced, which was wonderful. Storyline in episodes 1 and 2 were cliche and predictable, for example, the meeting with Constantine. However, we thought that the story was well paced and well executed, although it was a pity that the story could not break away from a cliche storyline. This story dealt with mature themes on a light note, which we thought was advantageous and educational. In a nutshell, though confusing at times, these confusing moments were well accounted for and the story well written.
Error:
There was no noticeable errors and language used was appropriate. No technical errors either. Well done.
Impact:
We loved the abundance of choices available. We also liked the fact that we could get to choose the type of personality Solidus has as this gave us control over his actions. This story fits very well into adventure category. In general, this was an interesting story and we thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Recommendation:
This is a well written story with a well developed plot. It is also short and sweet. We definitely recommend reading this story.
First Rating: 8/10
Plot/Storyline:9/10
Content/Flow: 8.5/10
Grammar: 4.9/5
Spelling: 4.9/5
Impact: 8/10
Overall Rating: 8.7/10
BEST HORROR STORY
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DEAD MEN WALKINGWritten by Arielle Carson
Life? Simple: You're born, you die. Until a worldwide phenomenon cause people to reanimate... |
First thoughts on Dead Men Walking
Title and Summary:
The cover art both big and small are very attractive. The small cover gives a great impression of what you’re about to read by displaying the zombie hand coming from the ground, while the story description is a bit more vague making the story seem more mysterious.
First rating: 8 /10
Overall review:
I found that the first chapter seemed more like a romance/drama than a horror story. It begins with a few models flirting and causing ruckus which definitely did a good job of displaying what life was like before the end of the world, but I would have liked to have seen more of a horror aspect in the opening episode. The positioning of characters were a bit off at times, and there was an excessive amount of cursing. (Although, in later chapters the cursing is minimal.) I didn’t really understand why Connor was wearing boxers when they went downstairs to eat breakfast. People made a big deal about Marina’s underwear showing but the boxers was no big deal? The length of the first episode was perfect and it had a great ending.
In chapter two we meet the first zombie. The author did a good job of displaying zombies with the limited features episode has for it. I loved the narration throughout the story. She was very descriptive and did a great job of explaining the things you can’t necessarily see.
I really enjoyed the character growth for Marina from the first episode. You can see her growing up, realizing how different life is going to be now that she has to act as the adult.There were a few grammar mistakes but not many. I did notice a few zooms were the author zoomed out so far you could see black which was a bit distracting but not a huge issue. & I LOVED the intro cover-art and ending cover-art to each episode. She did a great job at keeping the reader's attention.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 9 /10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 8/ 10
Overall rating: 8.3 /10
Title and Summary:
The cover art both big and small are very attractive. The small cover gives a great impression of what you’re about to read by displaying the zombie hand coming from the ground, while the story description is a bit more vague making the story seem more mysterious.
First rating: 8 /10
Overall review:
I found that the first chapter seemed more like a romance/drama than a horror story. It begins with a few models flirting and causing ruckus which definitely did a good job of displaying what life was like before the end of the world, but I would have liked to have seen more of a horror aspect in the opening episode. The positioning of characters were a bit off at times, and there was an excessive amount of cursing. (Although, in later chapters the cursing is minimal.) I didn’t really understand why Connor was wearing boxers when they went downstairs to eat breakfast. People made a big deal about Marina’s underwear showing but the boxers was no big deal? The length of the first episode was perfect and it had a great ending.
In chapter two we meet the first zombie. The author did a good job of displaying zombies with the limited features episode has for it. I loved the narration throughout the story. She was very descriptive and did a great job of explaining the things you can’t necessarily see.
I really enjoyed the character growth for Marina from the first episode. You can see her growing up, realizing how different life is going to be now that she has to act as the adult.There were a few grammar mistakes but not many. I did notice a few zooms were the author zoomed out so far you could see black which was a bit distracting but not a huge issue. & I LOVED the intro cover-art and ending cover-art to each episode. She did a great job at keeping the reader's attention.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 9 /10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 8/ 10
Overall rating: 8.3 /10
BEST ROMANCE STORY RUNNER-UPSHORT REVIEW |
MILA OF THE SEAWritten by Ani K.
You're a mermaid with seven days to find true love, or else you return to the seas forever! |
Title and Summary:
I love the unique title, it tells me who the main character is and where she's from without it being long or awkward sounding. Though it doesn’t sound like a romance title, at least it doesn’t sound cliche. The summary just clears things up even more; She's a mermaid! Having prophecies and a time limit to find "true love" falls on the correct side of the line that separates "cliche" and "classic" in my opinion as it feels like it'll be a modern, nautical, twist on a fairy tale. For once, I'm actually interested in what happens in the story, and by the style of writing, I am hoping for it to meet my expectations as I remain cautiously optimistic.
First rating: 7/10
Overall Review:
The story revolves around our MC, Mila. Mila is a mermaid who has just turned 16, which means it’s time for her to go on land, where she is given one week to find true love. If she fails in this quest, she’ll return to the ocean forever. From the very beginning, I am slightly put off by what's being presented to me, however; I'm getting a vibe of constant telling, rather than simply showing me, something I severely frown upon.. Other than that, though, the storytelling was actually not so bad. Mila is discovered on the beach by James, a prince in the kingdom where they are (whose name you get to choose in the beginning of episode one). James has a brother named Edward and together they make up the royal family, as their parents were lost at sea years ago. Neither brother is king, however, as the first to find his true queen will become the king. It’s immediately apparent to me that they will be Milas love interests, and as I read I find myself liking both of them. As for the characters themselves, the author does a good job of making them appear lifelike. One might look at the romance in the first few episodes and think ‘wow, this is moving fast’, but honestly, the girl has a week to find true love. It’s kind of hard to gain someone’s trust, become their friend, date them, get engaged, and then married realistically when you have a week to do all of that so I try to keep her time limit in mind. Plus, it’s pretty much a fairy tale. Princes, ‘true love’, mermaids… etc.
The choices in the story were plentiful, and made it feel very interactive. My only MAJOR problem with this story is that these first four episodes were incredibly short; how long were they? Less than a thousand lines for sure. I'm certain the author could have combined the first two episodes easily, and maybe even then it would have been short. I want to applaud the grammar in this story SO MUCH. This is by far the best grammar I have seen yet while judging. It’s not perfect, there are a couple missing commas and a few too many sentences that begin with the word “But” for my taste, but overall the author uses that often forgotten comma before addressing someone and I can’t express how happy that makes me! The directing is good, though there isn’t really anything special. She uses some background characters at the festival, which is nice. In the end, I did like the storytelling in Mila, it flowed well for me. Yes, she talks like a pretty little caveman in the first episode, but she did end up progressing throughout the story and honestly, I understand why she starts that way and since she gets a lot better it’s okay in the end for me. Other than that, though, the story did surprise me; this is something that I would continue to read, if the author could pick up the length of her chapters. Despite the fast pace, I’m a sucker for fantasy and true love, and I honestly like both brothers. Not only do I possibly plan on continuing reading, but I may re-read to pick the other brother someday. It may feel a tad unrealistic, fast, and silly at times, but it’s a fun romantic read!
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.25/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.25/5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 7.5 /10
I love the unique title, it tells me who the main character is and where she's from without it being long or awkward sounding. Though it doesn’t sound like a romance title, at least it doesn’t sound cliche. The summary just clears things up even more; She's a mermaid! Having prophecies and a time limit to find "true love" falls on the correct side of the line that separates "cliche" and "classic" in my opinion as it feels like it'll be a modern, nautical, twist on a fairy tale. For once, I'm actually interested in what happens in the story, and by the style of writing, I am hoping for it to meet my expectations as I remain cautiously optimistic.
First rating: 7/10
Overall Review:
The story revolves around our MC, Mila. Mila is a mermaid who has just turned 16, which means it’s time for her to go on land, where she is given one week to find true love. If she fails in this quest, she’ll return to the ocean forever. From the very beginning, I am slightly put off by what's being presented to me, however; I'm getting a vibe of constant telling, rather than simply showing me, something I severely frown upon.. Other than that, though, the storytelling was actually not so bad. Mila is discovered on the beach by James, a prince in the kingdom where they are (whose name you get to choose in the beginning of episode one). James has a brother named Edward and together they make up the royal family, as their parents were lost at sea years ago. Neither brother is king, however, as the first to find his true queen will become the king. It’s immediately apparent to me that they will be Milas love interests, and as I read I find myself liking both of them. As for the characters themselves, the author does a good job of making them appear lifelike. One might look at the romance in the first few episodes and think ‘wow, this is moving fast’, but honestly, the girl has a week to find true love. It’s kind of hard to gain someone’s trust, become their friend, date them, get engaged, and then married realistically when you have a week to do all of that so I try to keep her time limit in mind. Plus, it’s pretty much a fairy tale. Princes, ‘true love’, mermaids… etc.
The choices in the story were plentiful, and made it feel very interactive. My only MAJOR problem with this story is that these first four episodes were incredibly short; how long were they? Less than a thousand lines for sure. I'm certain the author could have combined the first two episodes easily, and maybe even then it would have been short. I want to applaud the grammar in this story SO MUCH. This is by far the best grammar I have seen yet while judging. It’s not perfect, there are a couple missing commas and a few too many sentences that begin with the word “But” for my taste, but overall the author uses that often forgotten comma before addressing someone and I can’t express how happy that makes me! The directing is good, though there isn’t really anything special. She uses some background characters at the festival, which is nice. In the end, I did like the storytelling in Mila, it flowed well for me. Yes, she talks like a pretty little caveman in the first episode, but she did end up progressing throughout the story and honestly, I understand why she starts that way and since she gets a lot better it’s okay in the end for me. Other than that, though, the story did surprise me; this is something that I would continue to read, if the author could pick up the length of her chapters. Despite the fast pace, I’m a sucker for fantasy and true love, and I honestly like both brothers. Not only do I possibly plan on continuing reading, but I may re-read to pick the other brother someday. It may feel a tad unrealistic, fast, and silly at times, but it’s a fun romantic read!
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.25/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.25/5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 7.5 /10
BEST ROMANCE/DRAMA
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Matchmaker, MatchmakerWritten by Layla Vex
Val never liked love, but if she wants to go home, she'll have to find his. Good luck! You're going to need it. |
First thoughts on: Matchmaker, Matchmaker
Title and Summary:The title is intriguing and gives me a few ideas on what the story is about. It could be a game show or reality show about finding love or a blog or love letter agency or even just a girl who can find love for everyone except herself. I’m very drawn in so far. The summary, “Val never liked love, but if she wants to go home, she’ll have to find his. Good luck! You’re going to need it.” is very interesting and confusing. Hopefully the story clears it up and I can find out the meaning to it. The cover isn’t anything special, just a photo the heart arrows. I’m very excited to read this story!
First Rating: 8/10
Overall review:
I absolutely love this story! Valentine, or Val, is a modern day Cupid. Her goal is to make her mother proud though she doesn’t like the whole idea and representation of love. But once her twin brother screws up once again another mission of hers her mother gives her a punishment. She is forced to find love for the unlovable and isn’t allowed home until she does so. Only one catch, he can see her and is immune to her powers. The plot is very well thought out and really unique, I love how the other incorporated the greek myths in the beginning with Aphrodite and Cupid (Eros). Each episode ends with a cliffhanger which causes the reader to want to read more. The episodes are long and enjoyable. The directing is great and can tell the author used the spot helper in a few scenes which is great, though I would have liked to see more. There was a good amount of choices per episode, and some altered the story from what I could tell. Grammar and punctuation was perfect and I found no errors. This is a story that I will definitely continue in the future and would widely recommend it to others. The story is very well written and thought out.
Plot: 5 /5
Story Content: 9/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 9/ 10
Overall Rating: 9.3/10
Title and Summary:The title is intriguing and gives me a few ideas on what the story is about. It could be a game show or reality show about finding love or a blog or love letter agency or even just a girl who can find love for everyone except herself. I’m very drawn in so far. The summary, “Val never liked love, but if she wants to go home, she’ll have to find his. Good luck! You’re going to need it.” is very interesting and confusing. Hopefully the story clears it up and I can find out the meaning to it. The cover isn’t anything special, just a photo the heart arrows. I’m very excited to read this story!
First Rating: 8/10
Overall review:
I absolutely love this story! Valentine, or Val, is a modern day Cupid. Her goal is to make her mother proud though she doesn’t like the whole idea and representation of love. But once her twin brother screws up once again another mission of hers her mother gives her a punishment. She is forced to find love for the unlovable and isn’t allowed home until she does so. Only one catch, he can see her and is immune to her powers. The plot is very well thought out and really unique, I love how the other incorporated the greek myths in the beginning with Aphrodite and Cupid (Eros). Each episode ends with a cliffhanger which causes the reader to want to read more. The episodes are long and enjoyable. The directing is great and can tell the author used the spot helper in a few scenes which is great, though I would have liked to see more. There was a good amount of choices per episode, and some altered the story from what I could tell. Grammar and punctuation was perfect and I found no errors. This is a story that I will definitely continue in the future and would widely recommend it to others. The story is very well written and thought out.
Plot: 5 /5
Story Content: 9/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 9/ 10
Overall Rating: 9.3/10
BEST FANTASY STORY RUNNER-UPSHORT REVIEW |
LEGEND OF GUARDIANSWritten by Lucee
Reincarnation of a legendary princess, you must face your past & fight the battle that you once lost. Will you succeed? |
Title and Summary: The title is very common between stories in the fantasy genre but it is very relevant to the story. Summary is nicely done, it was short and vague but still piquing a reader’s interest in reading the story. Love it!
Overall Review: This story was so good! It’s honestly so underrated and should definitely be given more credit and views. The plot was cliche but the author managed to weaved originality into it, making the whole story unique.Really love the whole creation of this made up world as it was really interesting to read about and also really fun! The characters were also very interesting to read about as they all have their own personality and charm, I especially love the chemistry between the protagonist and her potential love interest. The story was also perfectly paced and each chapter kept me wanting to know more as it managed to keep me on my toes chapter after chapter. The choices were also really fun and well done as it was impactful and adds a lot to the whole experience of reading the story. Appropriate sound effects were also added which makes it all the more better. This story is such a hidden jem!
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 9/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/5
Impact of story based on genre submitted: 9/10
Overall Review: This story was so good! It’s honestly so underrated and should definitely be given more credit and views. The plot was cliche but the author managed to weaved originality into it, making the whole story unique.Really love the whole creation of this made up world as it was really interesting to read about and also really fun! The characters were also very interesting to read about as they all have their own personality and charm, I especially love the chemistry between the protagonist and her potential love interest. The story was also perfectly paced and each chapter kept me wanting to know more as it managed to keep me on my toes chapter after chapter. The choices were also really fun and well done as it was impactful and adds a lot to the whole experience of reading the story. Appropriate sound effects were also added which makes it all the more better. This story is such a hidden jem!
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 9/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/5
Impact of story based on genre submitted: 9/10
BEST DRAMA STORY
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HIDEOUTWritten by Michelle L.
After five years in prison, Johnny is freed. Now, he just wants to move on, but can he do it with the past lingering? |
Title and Summary:
The name was concise and effective and the summary was captivating and interesting. The question makes me wonder who hides out there and what happens there! The covers are both black and purple, and I find that very alluring and mysterious! The font on the covers are easy and clear to read and stand out against the background!
First Rating: 7/10
Overall review based on the first 4 or 5 episodes:
The narration at the beginning of the very first chapter made me really sit and think about the world that we live in right now. When we finally meet the characters I am amazed at the perfect character positioning. The Author immediately shows us her skills in the scripting. I like how you gave the option to actually design an outfit, where you mix and match a top with bottoms, very cleverly thought out! The spelling is close to perfect and I noticed only a handful of punctuation errors, mainly just missing off a few full stops here and there. The plot is very interesting because the main character isn’t portrayed as a hero or a good person, so it drew me in as I hadn’t read a story from this perspective before! I like how you incorporated your own backgrounds, and the choice of backgrounds gave a much more adventurous feel to the story. I feel that the story is dramatic, but it is also adventurous, mysterious and action-packed. I like how we see things from various characters perspectives as it provides more of an insight and makes us decide which characters we like and dislike. A lot of scenes were actually very informative and I learnt a lot from reading! The chapters are all lengthy and a lot is covered in each chapter. I couldn’t find any faults, other than in certain parts the story was a bit slow-paced. Overall this was an incredible and eye-opening story, and cannot believe it hasn’t had many reads!
Plot: 4.5/5
Story Content: 8.5 /10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.5/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 8/10
Overall Rating: 8.5/10
The name was concise and effective and the summary was captivating and interesting. The question makes me wonder who hides out there and what happens there! The covers are both black and purple, and I find that very alluring and mysterious! The font on the covers are easy and clear to read and stand out against the background!
First Rating: 7/10
Overall review based on the first 4 or 5 episodes:
The narration at the beginning of the very first chapter made me really sit and think about the world that we live in right now. When we finally meet the characters I am amazed at the perfect character positioning. The Author immediately shows us her skills in the scripting. I like how you gave the option to actually design an outfit, where you mix and match a top with bottoms, very cleverly thought out! The spelling is close to perfect and I noticed only a handful of punctuation errors, mainly just missing off a few full stops here and there. The plot is very interesting because the main character isn’t portrayed as a hero or a good person, so it drew me in as I hadn’t read a story from this perspective before! I like how you incorporated your own backgrounds, and the choice of backgrounds gave a much more adventurous feel to the story. I feel that the story is dramatic, but it is also adventurous, mysterious and action-packed. I like how we see things from various characters perspectives as it provides more of an insight and makes us decide which characters we like and dislike. A lot of scenes were actually very informative and I learnt a lot from reading! The chapters are all lengthy and a lot is covered in each chapter. I couldn’t find any faults, other than in certain parts the story was a bit slow-paced. Overall this was an incredible and eye-opening story, and cannot believe it hasn’t had many reads!
Plot: 4.5/5
Story Content: 8.5 /10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.5/ 5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 8/10
Overall Rating: 8.5/10
BEST COMEDY STORY
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WHAT MARRIAGE CAN DO TO YOUWritten by Vik B.
Jhudora is up against her goody two-shoes sister in the Miss Witch Pageant. Can she secure a win and stay sane? |
(REVIEW IS IN PROGRESS)
BEST THRILLER STORY
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OzymandiasWritten by Rosalie Sands
It's up to you to investigate a haunted house, and discover how much you truly believe in the supernatural realm. |
First thoughts on: Ozymandias
Title and Summary:
The title is simply amazing and unique, nothing I have seen before. Although the summary was a quote, which didn’t really give a clear description of the story. The cover art was wonderful and creative.
First Rating: 9/10
Overall review:
I am speechless, to be quite honest! The first chapter was a little too fast, but the pace became perfect after that. The characters and their personalities are amazing, the relationship between Lyanna and her mother is very heartwarming.
The plot is very interesting and the grammar is on point, I love all of the mystery going on with the characters. I also love the fact that the author gave us a chance to be able to change the character’s hairstyle, makeup etc. The choices are also effective, so that gives much more entertainment for the reader as they get to see how the story turns out.
Plot: 5/5
Story Content: 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/5
Impact of story based on genre submitted: 10/10
Overall Rating: 9.8/10
Title and Summary:
The title is simply amazing and unique, nothing I have seen before. Although the summary was a quote, which didn’t really give a clear description of the story. The cover art was wonderful and creative.
First Rating: 9/10
Overall review:
I am speechless, to be quite honest! The first chapter was a little too fast, but the pace became perfect after that. The characters and their personalities are amazing, the relationship between Lyanna and her mother is very heartwarming.
The plot is very interesting and the grammar is on point, I love all of the mystery going on with the characters. I also love the fact that the author gave us a chance to be able to change the character’s hairstyle, makeup etc. The choices are also effective, so that gives much more entertainment for the reader as they get to see how the story turns out.
Plot: 5/5
Story Content: 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 5/5
Impact of story based on genre submitted: 10/10
Overall Rating: 9.8/10
BEST MYSTERY STORY RUNNER-UPSHORT REVIEW |
CAMPFIREWritten by Beth C.
A knife. A blood-curdling screem. There's a killer on the loose, and noting is as it seems at Wolf Grove Summar Camp... |
Title and Summary:
The title is unique and catchy. It has a strong mystery vibe to it and I love it. The cover art is stunning, definitely suited for the genre. The summary is intriguing and very powerful. I really want to know what’s going on in Wolf Grove Summer Camp right away.
Overall review:
The story has a strong introduction. It sets a mysterious mood right away. I noticed one or two typos, but other than that the language was perfect. I would like to note though that the author often split a single sentence in two different dialogues:
-No offense, but you’re supposed to be the responsible person at this camp
-And you’re drinking even when we’re not having a party, which baffled me a bit.
I loved the sound of music and sound effects. They really enhanced the mood of the story.
The directing was simple but good. There were a few occasions where the characters in the background were standing on weird spots like on chairs or tables.
The choices were great and engaging. They affected the story and made me feel a part of it.
The character introduction was smooth and the characters had distinguished personalities. There was great character development. There was a lot of drama involved which helped me understand the relationship between the characters and the characters themselves.
Nothing mysterious happened in the first chapter. It was more of a character and background info.
The first chapters were mostly introductory in my opinion. Some mysterious happenings occurred at the camp, markings on the beach, a girl’s disappearance, and some subtle hints about what happened last year, footsteps of an unknown person which seemed to prepare the ground for something big that’s about to come.
The chapters had great length but the pace was a bit slow. The chapters ended with a cliffhanger which was really engaging!
There were a few things that bugged me while reading. For example: I don’t understand how it is possible for a camp to operate without the presence of any adults. I kept wondering how a group of teenagers is on its own in a secluded area without any adults. Furthermore, in chapter 3 a girl goes missing from the camp but Laura, the camp leader, states that 24 hours have to pass before reporting someone missing. Is that still the case with minors? The missing girl, Leah, is eventually found and we find out that two days passed and no one notified the police, no one contacted her parents, no actions were taken in that area. I still can’t wrap my mind around how a 15 year old is a camp leader and there are no adults there. I could be mistaken but it felt really unrealistic and Laura kept getting on my nerves with her inability to take an initiative in such a serious situation.
Overall, I this story reminded me of classic mystery movies and it was enjoyable to read.
First rating: 10/10
Plot: 3/5
Story Content: 8/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.5/5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 7/10
Overall rating: 7.5/10
The title is unique and catchy. It has a strong mystery vibe to it and I love it. The cover art is stunning, definitely suited for the genre. The summary is intriguing and very powerful. I really want to know what’s going on in Wolf Grove Summer Camp right away.
Overall review:
The story has a strong introduction. It sets a mysterious mood right away. I noticed one or two typos, but other than that the language was perfect. I would like to note though that the author often split a single sentence in two different dialogues:
-No offense, but you’re supposed to be the responsible person at this camp
-And you’re drinking even when we’re not having a party, which baffled me a bit.
I loved the sound of music and sound effects. They really enhanced the mood of the story.
The directing was simple but good. There were a few occasions where the characters in the background were standing on weird spots like on chairs or tables.
The choices were great and engaging. They affected the story and made me feel a part of it.
The character introduction was smooth and the characters had distinguished personalities. There was great character development. There was a lot of drama involved which helped me understand the relationship between the characters and the characters themselves.
Nothing mysterious happened in the first chapter. It was more of a character and background info.
The first chapters were mostly introductory in my opinion. Some mysterious happenings occurred at the camp, markings on the beach, a girl’s disappearance, and some subtle hints about what happened last year, footsteps of an unknown person which seemed to prepare the ground for something big that’s about to come.
The chapters had great length but the pace was a bit slow. The chapters ended with a cliffhanger which was really engaging!
There were a few things that bugged me while reading. For example: I don’t understand how it is possible for a camp to operate without the presence of any adults. I kept wondering how a group of teenagers is on its own in a secluded area without any adults. Furthermore, in chapter 3 a girl goes missing from the camp but Laura, the camp leader, states that 24 hours have to pass before reporting someone missing. Is that still the case with minors? The missing girl, Leah, is eventually found and we find out that two days passed and no one notified the police, no one contacted her parents, no actions were taken in that area. I still can’t wrap my mind around how a 15 year old is a camp leader and there are no adults there. I could be mistaken but it felt really unrealistic and Laura kept getting on my nerves with her inability to take an initiative in such a serious situation.
Overall, I this story reminded me of classic mystery movies and it was enjoyable to read.
First rating: 10/10
Plot: 3/5
Story Content: 8/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4.5/5
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted: 7/10
Overall rating: 7.5/10
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ChARLIE CHALLENGERWritten by Robbin Benett
The job of a spy can take over anyone's life, but what happens when Charlie's brain is literally wired to do so? |
First thoughts on: Purgatory (&Friends)
Title and Summary:
The title makes me think the story is somewhat of a comedy, it reminds me of what sitcoms do. The cover art looks well made and it’s definitely not one for a comedy. The description is a quote about purgatory, which seems fitting, considering the title. I’m intrigued in the story.
First rating: 7.8/10
Overall review:
The story has many custom backgrounds, and you get to customize the main character which is nice. However the dialogue between the characters doesn’t really flow all that well, and some of the directing is off, (i.e. a scene where they were supposed to be sitting on the couch, they were sitting on the edge of the couch at the wrong size, making it look like they were floating). The concept is interesting, and it’s not dull to read, as you want to discover what you and the people you met are doing in purgatory.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Overall Score: 7.8/10
Title and Summary:
The title makes me think the story is somewhat of a comedy, it reminds me of what sitcoms do. The cover art looks well made and it’s definitely not one for a comedy. The description is a quote about purgatory, which seems fitting, considering the title. I’m intrigued in the story.
First rating: 7.8/10
Overall review:
The story has many custom backgrounds, and you get to customize the main character which is nice. However the dialogue between the characters doesn’t really flow all that well, and some of the directing is off, (i.e. a scene where they were supposed to be sitting on the couch, they were sitting on the edge of the couch at the wrong size, making it look like they were floating). The concept is interesting, and it’s not dull to read, as you want to discover what you and the people you met are doing in purgatory.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Overall Score: 7.8/10
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Purgatory (&Friends)Written by Bread Inc
It's up to you to investigate a haunted house, and discover how much you truly believe in the supernatural realm. |
First thoughts on: Purgatory (&Friends)
Title and Summary:
The title makes me think the story is somewhat of a comedy, it reminds me of what sitcoms do. The cover art looks well made and it’s definitely not one for a comedy. The description is a quote about purgatory, which seems fitting, considering the title. I’m intrigued in the story.
First rating: 7.8/10
Overall review:
The story has many custom backgrounds, and you get to customize the main character which is nice. However the dialogue between the characters doesn’t really flow all that well, and some of the directing is off, (i.e. a scene where they were supposed to be sitting on the couch, they were sitting on the edge of the couch at the wrong size, making it look like they were floating). The concept is interesting, and it’s not dull to read, as you want to discover what you and the people you met are doing in purgatory.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Overall Score: 7.8/10
Title and Summary:
The title makes me think the story is somewhat of a comedy, it reminds me of what sitcoms do. The cover art looks well made and it’s definitely not one for a comedy. The description is a quote about purgatory, which seems fitting, considering the title. I’m intrigued in the story.
First rating: 7.8/10
Overall review:
The story has many custom backgrounds, and you get to customize the main character which is nice. However the dialogue between the characters doesn’t really flow all that well, and some of the directing is off, (i.e. a scene where they were supposed to be sitting on the couch, they were sitting on the edge of the couch at the wrong size, making it look like they were floating). The concept is interesting, and it’s not dull to read, as you want to discover what you and the people you met are doing in purgatory.
Plot: 4/5
Story Content: 7.5/10
Spelling & Grammar: 4/ 5
Overall Score: 7.8/10
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