BEST COMEDY STORY
First thoughts on Hell's Verdict
Title and Summary
We found both the summary and title very intriguing and well fitting. The story sounds unique, unlike anything we’ve read so far. From this, we would definitely read this story, but based on first glance, we may not choose it if we were looking for a laugh. We feel like the first sentence would sound better by simply changing “is” a top attorney to “was” a top attorney, talking about Marissa’s perfect life in the past tense, hinting that something goes wrong, and she ends up in the Afterlife.
The plot is well thought-out and the character development is interesting and very well-done. The story was well planned, organized and it was executed with a smile. That might’ve sounded really cheesy, but it is true. Although the topics were viewed as deep, you brought out a good sense of humour into it. It started off with an intriguing beginning, and the rest were simple to understand and follow through. The beginning part, where Marissa starts working as a demon/lawyer, got us hooked and made us want to read more. We might not have read far enough, but we definitely felt that the excitement of the story plateaued after she was chosen to be a demon/lawyer.
Story content and flow
The pace of the story worked really well as it kept our interest from scene to scene, always keeping us in suspense. The length of each episode gave decent value to our passes. We knew that they wouldn't be wasted on a short episode. Each scene contributes something to the plot and all feel necessary. During the court scenes, we appreciated that you summarized parts of what was going on, because we know how long and dry scenes like that could get.
One thing that you could improve on is the regular missing punctuation at the end of sentences. It does distract from the story when it becomes a common occurrence.
Impact of the story based on the genre submitted
The story had a type of comedy that can really appeal to some people. We were torn between the two sides, but both agree that the comedy was well thought out, creative, and witty. We loved the little things you put up, such as having a random scene going on in the background while the main characters were having a conversation. It livened up the scene with that extra element, instead of having just straight dialogue between characters. The use of sounds and music were well incorporated into the story, which added to the mood of each scene. The intro was done well, and it did fit along with the writing style of the story, but we think that it can come across as a typical, cliche story to readers at first. We would suggest adding something extra to the introduction!
If you are looking for a memorable, original comedy, mixed with a bit of fantasy, this is the story for you! Some of us found ourselves laughing out loud at the witty remarks and funny situations sprinkled throughout the story, which is a hard thing to achieve! We loved that the protagonist was a strong, ruthless, and ambitious lawyer who is too good at her job for her own good. Definitely not your typical Nice Nancy. We can’t wait to see how she further develops over the course of the story. We appreciate the apparent effort put into it’s quality and the fun the author must of had while writing it, because we sure had fun reading it! So take a breather from the flood of romance stories out there and try something different that focuses on making you laugh and bringing a smile to your face. Checking out Hell’s Verdict is a great place to start!
Note that this review has been edited and proofread by Aisha.